Comments on: A Teachable Moment http://slightlyofftopic.com/news/a-teachable-moment/ A Random Gag in Three-Quarters Profile Thu, 10 May 2012 11:34:22 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.2 By: Dave http://slightlyofftopic.com/news/a-teachable-moment/comment-page-1/#comment-1868 Dave Thu, 07 Jan 2010 03:36:15 +0000 http://slightlyofftopic.com/?p=874#comment-1868 Thanks. Good feedback all! Thanks. Good feedback all!

]]> By: Sparty http://slightlyofftopic.com/news/a-teachable-moment/comment-page-1/#comment-1867 Sparty Thu, 07 Jan 2010 03:20:21 +0000 http://slightlyofftopic.com/?p=874#comment-1867 Both are good, but this one (Get us out of here!) is better because it is in keeping with the original movie dialog. Both are good, but this one (Get us out of here!) is better because it is in keeping with the original movie dialog.

]]> By: Dave http://slightlyofftopic.com/news/a-teachable-moment/comment-page-1/#comment-1866 Dave Thu, 07 Jan 2010 01:33:35 +0000 http://slightlyofftopic.com/?p=874#comment-1866 I think we can all agree that I'm better the second time around then... I understand what you are saying, my good sir! I think we can all agree that I’m better the second time around then… I understand what you are saying, my good sir!

]]> By: Ahmed http://slightlyofftopic.com/news/a-teachable-moment/comment-page-1/#comment-1865 Ahmed Wed, 06 Jan 2010 23:13:50 +0000 http://slightlyofftopic.com/?p=874#comment-1865 I agree, I think the second one is better, but for different reasons: the building tension from that scene in the movie translates well in the second comic due to the dialogue. So, you've got that buildup of seriousness. Then, your punchline disrupts it with a large dose of silliness. The original comic, on the other hand, read flatter: "That's no moon"--->"Oh, you're right"---> "Starbucks!!!". The silliness of the quote loses a lot of its effect because the change in tone isn't as drastic. I agree, I think the second one is better, but for different reasons: the building tension from that scene in the movie translates well in the second comic due to the dialogue. So, you’ve got that buildup of seriousness. Then, your punchline disrupts it with a large dose of silliness.

The original comic, on the other hand, read flatter: “That’s no moon”—>”Oh, you’re right”—> “Starbucks!!!”. The silliness of the quote loses a lot of its effect because the change in tone isn’t as drastic.

]]> By: Dave http://slightlyofftopic.com/news/a-teachable-moment/comment-page-1/#comment-1864 Dave Wed, 06 Jan 2010 17:45:14 +0000 http://slightlyofftopic.com/?p=874#comment-1864 Fair enough. I'm always trying to shorten the dialogue, but in this case, the extra cut may have been a bit too much... Fair enough. I’m always trying to shorten the dialogue, but in this case, the extra cut may have been a bit too much…

]]> By: Joe http://slightlyofftopic.com/news/a-teachable-moment/comment-page-1/#comment-1863 Joe Wed, 06 Jan 2010 16:02:24 +0000 http://slightlyofftopic.com/?p=874#comment-1863 Both are great, However I think that this one is slightly better, just for the extra reference. Both are great, However I think that this one is slightly better, just for the extra reference.

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